修改完稿內可以看見 1.Word追蹤修訂痕跡(輕鬆比對修改前後文)， 2. 右邊是外籍編輯的整體評價跟細部評價(例如單字選用或冗句刪除的原因)。
Hello! I thank you for letting me assist you with the personal statement for your important application to UCL. I have made several changes to correct English usage and make several suggestions for changes that might add clarity and impact. I applaud your hard work and the well-focused steps you have taken toward the admirable goals you have established for your career and wish you much luck with your application! Please feel free to request me by name, if I can help you out in the future.
I thought the essay clearly and concisely gives your relevant background, and your interest in the subject clearly comes through.